My updated music video - audience feedback

This is my music video so far, i have added a scene on the beach since the last time i uploaded my video. The last time i did some audience feedback my audience said they wanted more locations, so for the next scene the band left the music studio and went to the beach, this made the music video more interesting as there are more locations and it was what my target audience wanted. They also said they wanted the band to have more eye contact with the audience, so when i did my beach scene i made sure when the band were singing the chorus they made eye contact with the camera, i also did a few shots where members of the band were individually making eye contact with the camera. I did this because my target audience is mainly women that are in love with  these band members, so because the band members are making eye contact with the camera it is like they are having contact with the women and it is making the women love them, it also draws the audience in. My audience also said they wanted a wider variety of shots, so in my beach scene i did that. I put in more panning shots of the band, more extreme close ups and slow motion shots. I think the wider variety of shots works well because it makes the video more interesting and stops it from getting dull and boring. The shots also work well to create a sense of emotion, the slow motion close ups really create a sense emotion coming from the band.

I got 5 or 6 members of a year 12 class to watch my new music video and asked them to give me feedback on it, this is what they said:

Positive:

• very clear genre
• looks just like a real music video
• stuck to 'boyband' codes and conventions
• good variety of shots
• like the change of location
• lip sync works well, good timing
• eye contact is nice
• editing creates a good sense of emotion
• very nice costume on the beach, represents the characters well
• good aspirational shots

Negative:

• framing isn't great on some of the shots, sometimes the top of the bands members head is cut off
• another location would be good
• slow down some of the shots, would make it more emotional 
• some of the transitions are to fast, need to slow them down

I have taken all this audience feedback into account and i will try and fix the negative feedback by adding more locations, better framed shots. slowing down the clips and transactions. I will take all this into account when i go and film the final part of music video.